Friday, October 9, 2015
Descriptive Free-Write Eng 101
Descriptive Free-Write
Everybody shows up on Friday at 3 p.m. . We all set up our beds put her belongings out and make it has if it was our own room. This is a special place for me that only comes around once a year for the weekend. One time I was setting up my bed there was a person next to me who was not in the best of moods so I talked to her for a little bit. I can tell that she wasn't feeling good by the body language you was doing and how she was talking and presenting herself. We got to talking for about an hour or so afterwards she felt a whole lot better she was going through some hard stuff. We went for a walk as we were walking we can smell dinner floating in the air and it smells delicious. It smells like something that came from a five star restaurant that you just could not leave any leftovers. When I sat together along with other people at the dinner table we had our dinner and it was delicious. Afterwards there was a really nice dessert that we all got together it was apple pie and vanilla bean ice cream. The taste was superb. I love the waves ice cream melts melts on your tongue when you're eating it. After that we all got together in the huge living room that they have and we talked for an hour and a half sharing are events that has happened in our life. Sometimes the message that they're getting across makes one of us women cry. It is very touching to hear what another person is going through and I life and how far that they have the message that they are getting across makes one of us women cry. It is very touching to hear what another person is going through and I life and how far that they have came. When that is all over we end up going to bed. Usually it takes me a little bit of time to go to sleep even after I taking melatonin. I can remember the last time I was having to go to sleep and I couldn't I tossed and turned all night I repositioned my pillow on my left arm I repositioned my pillow on my right arm I laid on my back I laid on my stomach but nothing still seem to work. Finally my body just gave up and I was tired and I was able to go to sleep. It's about 8 o'clock in the morning now the next day and breakfast is ready for all of us to eat. We usually will end up taking a shower getting ready and walk up to where our breakfast is. We usually end up getting a cup of coffee with some coffee creamer in it and just a teaspoon of sugar. I mix that together and it taste nice and sweet. After breakfast the family we will usually play cards or board games or just you activities throughout the whole day until it's time for dinner again. One of my favorite things to also do there is I like going in the canoe boat. When I'm on the canoe boat in the lake I feel free. I feel free from the world free from anything that's on my mind just like a free spirit would feel. I gently put one pedal in the water on my right side then I take it out put it over my head and put the paddle into the left side and just keep stroking left and right and eventually my speed starts to pick up and I can just feel like as if I'm floating across the water. When I'm out here with my family for the weekend my mind is free from the world. I really enjoy my time.
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This sounds like a good time with friends and family. Be sure that you are using as many show vs. tell details as possible. Be specific and clear, vivid, using various types of adjectives, similes, and metaphors. I know this is a freewrite, but be careful when reviewing your spelling, grammar, and other errors prior to publishing your post.
ReplyDeleteJennifer,
ReplyDeleteGood post! Sounds like a very supportive and care-free environment. I would suggest taking some of the examples you used in your writing and expanding on them to be a little more descriptive. What is it like when you are on the canoe on the water? Describe the smell and taste of the coffee. What does the sun feel like when it hits you in the face? Just a few suggestions. Its really hard to read someone else's writing and make suggestions when you have things to work on with your own!