Jennifer Martinez
Eng 101
I really hope I'm doing this right.
1.) In the story destroyed wrote by Martin it talks about athletes as ''sinners'' who have ruined their sports do to the addiction of drugs and how dangerous drugs are. It also talks about Professional sports and steroid use. Written by Peter Martin
2.) In paragraph number 10 it talks about professional complication with steroids and athletes. It talks about enhancers being a good way to treat sports but also a way of destroying the players by saying they cheat using steroids
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3.) My favorite quoit in this story from paragraph 11 second to last sentence where it says 'there are humans like the rest of us.' "Or at least they were before they started juicing." ( Written by Peter Martin. On page number 508.) It is my favorite part because I understand how people might struggle with addiction.. How a person might feel completely normal has a human one day. Say a person is then prescribe prescriptions and they end up getting addicted. This might make the person feel nothing like a human.
I comment on:
1.) http://charlottels.blogspot.com/2015/09/blog-post-1.html?showComment=1443043420143#c4096234091827809147
2.) http://apisorchik.blogspot.com/2015/09/destroyed-article-destroyed-by-peter-f.html?showComment=1443044716816#c6926456658887363957
9/26/15 I went back and did some changes that my peers said and you. Thank you.
Hi Jennifer! In your favorite quote section of this assignment, you talked about how athletes needed to take prescriptions thus causing the addiction. I personally perceived these as nonprescription drugs, or perhaps as prescription drugs that didn't have a need to be prescribed. Is this what you were meaning or is it something different?
ReplyDeleteAlso, in your summary you talked about sinners. Who exactly are the sinners? The fans, the players, or who?
Hi Jennifer!
ReplyDeleteOverall I liked your blog. The last sentence is really hard to read and you need a page number and the author in () after you posted your quote to be in MLA format.
Other than that, good job, and I liked the blog.
Hey, Jennifer!
ReplyDeleteyour blog looks pretty good. Although i believe you could be slightly more descriptive by showing (as Spencer said above) to include the author plus the page number of your quote and add more to your overall summary. You hit the bare bone minimum or maybe even relatively below the requirements for a summary.
I really liked that blurb about being human before juicing, too, Jennifer! And I would have to agree with David on his assessment of your post at the core of it, although it could have been criticized a bit more tactfully.
ReplyDeleteJennifer:
ReplyDeleteThe summary is pretty short...When we summarize, although they're meant to be somewhat short, you need to consider what the author the main point the author is trying to convey in their writing. Once you have pinpointed that, then you build the summary around that, by honing in on his key points in support of that. It should be much less about "It talks about" and more focused in general.
In regards to the paraphrase, I'm seeing similiar language with "it talks about" rather than referring to the content or the author. With paraphrasing, you might state "Martin seems to address the "professional complication" of steriod use among athletes..." Be careful what you know is oyour own words and what comes directly verbatim from the article. Moreover, in paraphrasing, since we're still taking information from a source we need to provide a parenthetical citation at the end of the paraphrase, which would look like: (Martin 582).
My last suggestion when using a blog is to make sure you double check your spelling and grammar (specifically for complete sentences) prior to publishing. Review MLA, so you continue to cite the sources correctly, as you forgot a works cited for the article. Keep these pointers in mind for future assignments! :)
Hello Jennifer!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy your blog! Your summary covers the general points of the article "Destroyed". You could use some more detail! I enjoyed the quote you used, and how you could relate to it and understand it. Your MLA is a little bit off, you might consider fixing that. Other than that great job on the first assignment!
I really like your quote Jennifer, I've struggled with addiction for many years and am now in recovery. I thought you summed it up and worded it very well.
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